tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3226907212760963160.post351406493044634901..comments2023-05-29T04:21:01.050-04:00Comments on Fantasy Writers Unite: Character Creations - Character RelationsJennifer Inneshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17619839376948089408noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3226907212760963160.post-20630583993639269232009-04-05T22:17:00.000-04:002009-04-05T22:17:00.000-04:00I remember feeling queasy after reading several of...I remember feeling queasy after reading several of your "love scenes" <BR/>You wrote-"He leaned in and gently pat her back, more like her shoulder, since the small of her back was off limits. His firm hand retracting as quickly as it had appeared, hanging next to his body limply. She liked him. He liked her. They nodded and parted ways forever."<BR/>I threw up after reading that. Hard. Have you ever thrown up hard? Its not something you brag about.<BR/>Heres my version-<BR/>"She was hot. He totally wanted to have sex with her. His hand held her butt, all the while drugs flowed in his blood stream giving her a purple glow which illuminated her hotness. The beat down he had delivered to the pirates still fresh in his mind. Another thing that was fresh: her breath as he made out with her."<BR/><BR/>But I do agree that people need to recognize its the characters saying the words, doing the deeds.Andrewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05266709510320591563noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3226907212760963160.post-69196097311635394002009-04-01T13:04:00.000-04:002009-04-01T13:04:00.000-04:00ROTFL!! That should so be the next ride at Disney...ROTFL!! That should so be the next ride at Disneyland. Around one corner you'll smote sinners, around the next, you dive into the baptismal pool, who knows what else they could come up with !?!!<BR/><BR/>P.S. I can't remember which one I voted for so I can't gloat about winning but for the record Jesus rocks!!Taterloyydhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09732834078213281916noreply@blogger.com